Welcome to the site. The bio looks well put together; the only thing that needs to be edited is the starting tech, as right above you'll notice it says that your starting tech cannot cost over 2 TEXP. Intangibility costs 10. Void is a cost heavy package being a AdvIII magix set. You can leave your starting tech blank and RP until you have 8 TEXP and have it added if you like or choose a different starting tech. If you have any starting questions or concerns, feel free to ask and you should (generally) receive a swift reply. Besides that, your bio will be placed up with your first update.